Unfortunately, I read the older version first, and I think it would have worked better the other way round...
Really? I'm surprised. I felt there were quite a few clunky sentences in the old version. Also, I don't think I cut any of the period detail, just spread it out a bit. But maybe I'm remembering wrong.
Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed both versions. Thank you very much for reading.
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Date: 2013-04-09 09:17 am (UTC)Really? I'm surprised. I felt there were quite a few clunky sentences in the old version. Also, I don't think I cut any of the period detail, just spread it out a bit. But maybe I'm remembering wrong.
Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed both versions. Thank you very much for reading.